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Blackbird
sweeping across the snow
left me a feather
and away he goes

and away he goes
drifting up on the air
but I seem to be stuck here
melting in the cold
cannot rip my eyes from the sky
cannot get my fists to unfold
the words have frozen to our tongues
that's what happens to winter love

so you think this feather is enough to make a wing
so you try to free me from it,
but your claws only sting.
i walk away
come to regret every footfall
but I can't keep you down
because you're up
and I'm frozen to the ground

Blackbird
laying pale in the snow
Blackbird
he can soar no more
you didn't have to do that
have to fall on your own sword
cut your wings apart
to get me back home.
and as I see you freeze
I know now what it is I believe
that someone could give up everything
for love
come down to the winter
from above
do you know the secret, Bird?
learn to live with the cold
though you turn blue
the heart beats hot inside of you

I know it
for the contest from #RomanceforEveryone "winter love" [link]

- for the "blackbird's feather" prompt

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LostGryphin Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Nicely done - congrats on the DD
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Karinta Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Student General Artist
Such a simple poem yet has such a strong message! I do love the way there are sporadic rhymes in no pattern.
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KyaniteArcher Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I loved this poem. Didn't really see the necessity of the last line, but the rest of it seems pretty good. I liked how you wrote Blackbird so many times without making it seem repetitive, and that really ties the poem together.
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
    Have a nice day! :heart:
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
this is so lovely~
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SimpleSilkSky Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh thank you so much. your signature, where is that from?
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
my signature is from this poem - [link]
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SimpleSilkSky Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
awesome C: and it's orginal. love the poem btw
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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RoyalBlackheart Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013   Writer
Greetings from #RomanceforEveryone staff! Thank you for entering our recent contest; we'll be working on the results very soon.

The ending of this poem was incredibly attractive. It's an easy read with a clear, consistent flow to it.

Good luck on the contest!
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