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I miss your heart in my hands
I miss being followed around
you've been burned into my skin,
I swore I'd never get near,
something so hot again

I wish I could have you
to look pretty in my house
I wish I could wear you
as the clothing on my back.
hold me fast, and leave like you do
if I need to make my day, I make it without you.
oh and all the expectations
like weights around the ankles  
and I, I wandered
straight into the river

I don't know if I'll ever be ready
if I grow up,
you grow up too.
'cos things are changing faster than me and you can move,
things are getting darker
and I'm losing sight of you.
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~Adonael Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I liked the river metaphor, but the repetition on the last line was a bit...melodramatic for my taste. But looking at some of the comments below, some people seem to enjoy it :shrug:

P.S. The first stanza was also cool in a gritty sort of way.
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~SimpleSilkSky Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
yeah I agree about the repetition thing, I might change it even C:
oh no those aren't my supporters, those are just my stupid friends haha

P.S thank you for the time you took to read and write this :heart:
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~Adonael Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I had assumed as much :P

No worries :rose:
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~SimpleSilkSky Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'll take those flowers thanks
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~Adonael Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
-bows- :)
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~SimpleSilkSky Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
wooow
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~Adonael Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
...if that's what I get when I bow, I can't imagine how you'd react to this:

:juggle: xD
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~SimpleSilkSky Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
-is taken aback- are you a wizard?!?
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=lakare Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
just lie back here on this table.... you need to be punished....
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~SimpleSilkSky Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
well that was interesting
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